Adding weight to what others have already said, it needs to be at the most 2 minutes long and the text at the top gets lost in the very bright and colourful game footage. You don't have to go into everything, but here is the "flow" I recommend for the trailer...
1. Introduce your robot...
2. ...then the game world...
3. ...and what he can do in it!
That said, I rather like what you have done with the game. Simple, but effective.
Yeah I know, I'm already working on it. All of your feedback has given me energy, thanks.
I'll post the new one here as soon as I finish it. 
I feel like I should have asked for feedback a lot earlier in development, interacting with you guys and getting really good suggestions is amazing.
I was just caught up in my part time job these past few days as there were a lot of orders and I was running low on money 
But now I can focus on the game...
Hey everyone, I finished the new introduction video and posted it in another thread:
