http://beavertoe.com/EAT/ I want to use my skills in video games (obviously), but the link goes to a comic I made. I'd like to get some feedback on my art and style. Thanks.

You should talk to Boolean, our friendly neighborhood comic artist. He may have a few pointers for you.

how'd you get a rating of 16?
:-0


anyway, i think the spoon might be better off being silver,

i may be a little slow, but im assuming that in the last picture, the girl is tasting the disgusting slop, it looks more as if she's nervous instead of soon to be sick


on number 8, the guy says ''im stewing the yams''
wouldnt it be stirring?
if its a stew, isnt he still sturring it?


idk
i tried :-)


hey, I got a wacom tablet and photoshop yesterday, and i was hoping you could give me some feedback on my first attempts at 'art'


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hand drawing
http://i247.photobucket.com/albums/gg137/RABdrawings/boggy.jpg
PS work
http://i247.photobucket.com/albums/gg137/RABdrawings/BOGGYPS.jpg
-
hand drawing
http://i247.photobucket.com/albums/gg137/RABdrawings/jack.jpg
PS
http://i247.photobucket.com/albums/gg137/RABdrawings/jack_PSversion.jpg
-
http://i247.photobucket.com/albums/gg137/RABdrawings/meatcleaverPS.jpg



thanks for your time, i hope my suggestions made sense as well as helped.

The art seemed fine, but I got through 8 pages and the story is... er, bizarre. :-)

Quote: Original post by blackvans1234
how'd you get a rating of 16?
:-0


anyway, i think the spoon might be better off being silver,

i may be a little slow, but im assuming that in the last picture, the girl is tasting the disgusting slop, it looks more as if she's nervous instead of soon to be sick


on number 8, the guy says ''im stewing the yams''
wouldnt it be stirring?
if its a stew, isnt he still sturring it?


idk
i tried :-)


hey, I got a wacom tablet and photoshop yesterday, and i was hoping you could give me some feedback on my first attempts at 'art'


---------
hand drawing
http://i247.photobucket.com/albums/gg137/RABdrawings/boggy.jpg
PS work
http://i247.photobucket.com/albums/gg137/RABdrawings/BOGGYPS.jpg
-
hand drawing
http://i247.photobucket.com/albums/gg137/RABdrawings/jack.jpg
PS
http://i247.photobucket.com/albums/gg137/RABdrawings/jack_PSversion.jpg
-
http://i247.photobucket.com/albums/gg137/RABdrawings/meatcleaverPS.jpg



thanks for your time, i hope my suggestions made sense as well as helped.

Thanks for the feedback. Stewing is a process of slow roasting something in a liquid, and stewed yams are in fact a real life dish.

Hand-drawn Boggy is awesome! He looks full of character. For some reason the PS Boggy just isn't the same, though. He lost the liveliness and character. It may be the lack of outline on the eyes and pupils, but mainly that the lines aren't solid. In a drawing, non-solid lines look fine, but on CPU-made art, it looks uneven or like it's not finished. With such a cute cartoony character, the lines should be solid all the way around I think. As for Jack the Great Pumpkin King, they're alright I guess. Are they supposed to be based on that character? The knife looks good, but the handle and blade should form one straight line. It looks a little bent and out of whack, like you drew it right but then used the skew tool on it. Hope that helps you out!

Boolean Boolean where are you?

And Smitty, did you stop after 8? Please finish! The artwork and story gets better. (not much of a story YET, but...)

Thanks all for your replies!

@blackvans1234: My rating mostly came from replying to things with my opinions, which weren't necessarily welcome. I think I'm also kind of annoying when I have a problem. In any case, I'm trying to get the rating up to something in the triple digits.

@waru: the story is pretty odd, but thats kind of normal for us. The artwork is not bad, interesting style -- which is why I mentioned boolean. Some of his comics are in a more developed, but similar style.

war -
im trying to figure out how to make straight lines, the pen tool is quite the nuisnce for me, and idk how to use just about everything on photoshop yet


i also have no idea what/where the skew tool is
lol

medevil, yea someone got mad at me cuz i posted this, in this section
http://www.gamedev.net/community/forums/topic.asp?topic_id=490296

then i posed this in the beginners section to get more exposure
http://www.gamedev.net/community/forums/topic.asp?topic_id=490303
(along wiht a new question)
and ppl got all mad and i guess someone gave me a bad rating

you must've done that ALOT
lol
jk

Quote: Original post by blackvans1234
war -
im trying to figure out how to make straight lines, the pen tool is quite the nuisnce for me, and idk how to use just about everything on photoshop yet


i also have no idea what/where the skew tool is
lol

medevil, yea someone got mad at me cuz i posted this, in this section
http://www.gamedev.net/community/forums/topic.asp?topic_id=490296

then i posed this in the beginners section to get more exposure
http://www.gamedev.net/community/forums/topic.asp?topic_id=490303
(along wiht a new question)
and ppl got all mad and i guess someone gave me a bad rating

you must've done that ALOT
lol
jk

A word of warning, nothing will sink your rating more than complaining about it. Though, considering everyone starts out with 1000, and you have 998, i'd say your rating is fine. Either way, don't worry about your rating. It is simply a number, worry instead what it represents.

@waru:
You have a good understanding of scene continuity, as evinced by your layouts. You need to work on your figure fundamentals a bit, though - anatomy in particular. Your rendering is smart, going with flat colors, but over time you'll want to add light sources, shadow and depth.

@blackvans1234:
Your work is also flat. It's a perfectly valid stylistic choice, but you'll definitely want to improve and demonstrate an understanding of volume, light and shade and perspective. You'll also want to show compositions involving multiple objects and non-blank backgrounds. Plain white backgrounds are particularly boring [smile]

Good luck, both of you, and good start!