Hi guys this a piece of a plot I've been writing in my free time, I think it may fit in a visual novel game and I would really appreciate any thoughts about it ( goods or bads) also excuse me if I don't use the appropriate words because English is not my natural language.

You are in a long stone street in the commercial side of the big city on your way home when you see a mysterious hooded person running of the sewer at high speed, he drops a shiny object so you decide to drag your sword and enter the sewer while picking up the golden necklace.

After walking a bit you find a half-opened secret door which leads to a passage inside the royal palace, as you go inside you start feeling a strange aura and a weird smell just before finding a dead body, king Archer's dead body...