Hi! I managed to produce this straight-forward soundtrack tune which tries to capture the feeling of massive steampunk airships rising to the air as the armada begins it's journey: Lords of the Sky (mp3) I'd like to hear some opinions and critique - what works, what doesn't and does it capture the feel and vision at all? Thank you! -Matti

It starts a bit too average, like a lot of movie sounds. It doesn't really stand out. Also a bit too happy for the start of an invasion, I'd envision a darker, more serious, tune - assuming this armada is either an invasion force or a defensive operation.

Not that I'm a music expert - far from it - but it's how I think the track comes over. Good luck improving it. :)

Solid points, thank you for your insight! I sort of mislead in my original post though, as the situation is actually a bit more to the happier side - it is sort of a "parade" with no actual battle in sight, so this was the reason why the general atmosphere is more similar to a scene with cheering crowds and balloons. But it would be interesting to try something similar from the battle viewpoint.

I really like this, but as Captain P said, it does sound a bit average. Maybe a bit more variation through the track? There's a lot of repetition, and although I can tell you've built around the main theme with other sounds, they need to stand out a bit more to really bring the track to life.
Other than that, fantastic job.

The piece itself is pretty good, and you have some nice ideas here. I think your biggest problem is that you are assigning this piece to the wrong event. For example, I could see this piece working great in a castle stage of an RPG. Not when battles are happening, but when you are exploring the castle and talking to all of the people. (Think Dragon Warrior or Chrono Trigger). But I agree with the earlier posts, for a flying fleet about to invade- this music doesn't fit.


My only constructive point to make is this piece needs some more variety. While the ideas are nice, it gets too repetitive after a while. I know you put in a brief pause and then you go back into the main idea. Why not have the pause lead into a constrasting section, noodle with that for a while, and then bring back the main theme.

I think this will round out the piece better.

Overall, nice work!

Thanks for sharing!

I have a few suggestions for you...

Its got a good idea with it...the best thing you may want to do is add a punch to it. The cellos and violins aren't strong enough to make an impact. Everything seems to be around the same level. Maybe also use panning on some things...seperate the strings from the woodwinds.

I've heard a lot of terrible sounding crap in my time (some of it was my own heh) , but that certainly isn't included in the list. ;)

I listened to quite a few of your pieces on the website. Overall I was well satisfied by your work. I try not to comment on anything other than the technical aspect, because anything else is just personal preference, and I see no technical problems with any of the work, even the few pieces I wasn't particularly fond of.