Hello. I'm not native english-speaker, so I ask this question. Please help me to write this texts correctly... 1. When final game outro played, I show two characters, a princess and a little magician (main character).. I show dialogue using very small 60x24px baloons: - O, brave Dany, you saved me! - I love, you, Milena! - O, Dany! I have doubts that english-speakers pronounce "O", seems they pronounce "Oh," is it right? Or I can leave dialogues with "O, brave.."? 2. Also I need to "beautify" or "literary" the folowing text, the game story. ...Upon a time, in a far magicland, a little magician Dany lived. He loved princess Milena very much. One day evil sorcerer Gwerk stoled princess and put her in magic dungeons of his dark castle. Many brave knights attempted to save the princess, but all they find only their own end.. And now.. little magician decided to free princess. Does he succeed? This is depended only on you... "put her" - how to translate this well.. "entrapped"? I also need to shrink this text [beautify my ugly phrases] to put all text only to a 3-4 101x80px "screens"... 3. Game main menu: New Continue ... ... Exit -what is better by sense, use word "Continue" (after save) or I can use word "Resume"? I noticed that "Resume" mainly used only in a sense "resume to a game after pause", but not "resume gameplay in next time". The question is because word "Continue" is too long for small mobile screens :-) Also what is better (I mean common.. well perceive) - to use word "Exit"? Or word "Quit"? Thanks in advance.

- Oh, brave Danny, you saved me!
- I love, you, Milena!
- Oh, Danny!

You can use Danny informally (nick-name used by close friends) or Daniel for a formal name.

Once upon a time, a little magician named Daniel lived in a far-away magical land. He loved princess Milena very much. One day the evil sorcerer Gwerk kidnapped princess Milena and imprisoned her in the magic dungeons of his dark castle. Many brave knights attempted to save the princess, but all they met an untimely end. And now... the little magician has decided to free princess. Will he succeed? His success depends on you...

I think I would replace "Will he succeed? His success depends on you..." with "Thier fate will depend on you..." referring to both the magician and princess.

3) Continue is the typical gaming term. You can abbreviate (shorten) it to “Cont.”
Quit is most common in games, Exit is common in business software.

[Edited by - Shannon Barber on September 12, 2005 8:30:24 PM]

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Original post by Shannon Barber ... but all they met an untimely end.

should be:

... but they all met an untimely end.

You don't need a comma after love.
I love you, Dany.

If you the name you are using here is supposed to have a sound like the A in apple, it is spelled Danny.

Thanks to all who helped me!


I asked google, seems that name exist, but yes, Danny is much more common.. I dont know why Danny, just first that come to mind. I suppose Rex is a not good name for little wizard? :-)

I want Danny to be named "Dannie", "Daniel". (not Deny) :-) to be "a" sounded as ae, a short opened sound like "Apples", though I don't know how this pronounced exactly... :-)